Want to critique my flyers?

I am looking for feedback on these flyers. They are small flyers that will be distributed door to door in target neighborhoods.
Which one should I keep and refine? What wording should I keep/trash? Visual appeal? Is the second one too crowded and wordy? All comments appreciated.


http://images5.theimagehosting.com/flyer1.4.jpg


http://images5.theimagehosting.com/flyer2.8.jpg

Thanks in advance,

  • John

I like both of them. Try them both and see which one get’s better results.

Personally if I were in a situation I’d like more info up front before I call so I know what it is you would plan to do-everyone’s different though.

Most “experts” say not to put too much info.

The key is to get them to call…

I like the first one better, but like aznewbie said, it would be a good idea to test both to find out the results. Just make sure you keep track of which flyer you put on which houses. If you do test both of them, let us know here what the results of the test were!

Take out the “Make up back payments” include something like “offer in 48 hrs.” :o

So, it sounds like you folks are leaning toward the first one, which is more brief and bold. Thanks for the suggestion, CharlottePlayer. Assuming I will try that one first, what would you refine? Any other wording suggestions - I could probably fit on another bullet or two, if necessary. Should I enclose any of the text in a box for contrast, as I did in the second one?

  • J

Maybe try a box around the entire flyer for contrast.

Add “or pressure” to the no hassles part
Add Fix ups ok

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